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本文節錄自：大學入學考試中心 選才通訊第142期 學測與指考英文作文評分樣例 第一處 游春琪彙整

說明：1. 依提示在「答案卷」上寫一篇英文作文。
　　　 2. 文長120個單詞(words)左右。

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樣例

學測編號1：特優－19分

One evening, a man named Kris attended a wedding party. It was held in a luxury hotel, where there were a lot of guests.

Everyone talked lively and happily during the meal, including Kris. Being the best friend of the couple, Kris drank a lots in ecstasy because he felt really happy for them.

Later, Kris excused himself and left the party. He stood on the road, waiting for a taxi. But, unfortunately, he drank too much to stay conscious. Upon seeing a car coming to him, Kris waved his arms immediately, saying "Hey, Taxi!" loudly. Then the car stopped. However, Kris wasn´t aware that was a police car, not a taxi!

Kris couldn´t remember anything that had happened during the drive to the police office.He was waken up by a thunderous sound, "What are you doing? Do you know where it is?" said the police officer. Kris was shocked to death but had no reason for explaination.

About 30 minutes later, Kris was allowed to leave. He was ashamed for his "trip to the police office." He appologized to the police officer for his irrational behavior, and promised that he wouldn´t do it again.

說 明：主題明確，內容敘述相當具體且完整。重點分明，組織具連貫性。文句富變化，幾無文法錯誤（第二段第二句中a lots，應為a lot。）。詞彙使用妥適，稍有拼字的錯誤（例：第四段句中的explaination與最後一段中的appologized皆為錯字。）。

學測編號2：優－17分

One evening, John was invited to his old friend´s wedding. Meeting so many classmates in university, he became more and more excited. He talked a lot with other, laughed happily, and also, drank a lot.

When it got darker and darker outside, he knew that he had to go home. So much did he drank that he couldn´t even drive home on his own. He then walked on the side of the road and tried to find a taxi to take him home. He waved to the cars, shouted out something, and even ran onto the road with his body turning round. Not long after he did these, here came a car. It stopped in front of him, and he got on the car without hesitation. And soon, he fell asleep.

When he opened his eyes again, he found himself in the police station. To his dismay, he didn´t remember what he had done yesterday. A policeman came up to him and scolded him angrily. He was too embarrassed to look up at him. He really learned a lesson from the impressing mistake.

說明：主題之敘述完整，文意清楚。組織上前後連貫，轉承語使用大致得當；句型雖有變化，文法錯誤少，但仍有用法與拼字錯誤。標點符號亦稍有不當。

學測編號3：優－16分

One evening, I went to one of my friends´ weeding in my black suit. I was happy that he married a nice girl. And I was so excited that I drank too much. On my way home, my head was dazzling and my feet were heavy that I couldn´t walk well. So I gave up walking home, waving my hand to stop a taxi. Though I thought that taxi was strange with the sparking light, I still got into the car and told the driver my address. Then I fell into a deep dream in the taxi. The next morning I woke up, I felt uncomfortable and tried to move my limbs to make myself awake. When I stood up, I found that I was in the police station instead of my bedroom. What happened last night? A policeman pointed at the police car outside and told me "That was the "taxi" you took last night, do you have any problem now?"

說明：主題敘述具體，但內容略嫌不足。句型有變化，偶有文法錯誤。用字尚稱得宜，雖偶有用法與拼字錯誤，但未影響文意之表達。標點符號稍有不當。

學測編號4：可－14分

One evening, there was a wedding party at a fancy hotel. The party´s atmosphere was so happy and all people including the guests and the new couples cheered to each other all night. Later, the party was over and every person was much drank.

The night became darker and darker and there was few cars on the streets. One of the guests was about to go home by taxi, but he was so much drunk that he couldn´t even distinguish the taxi between the police car. He hired the police car and took on. The police asked where he lived patiently, but he just kept smiled without saying any words…

The next morning, the man finally awoke, finding himself sitting in the police office. He was shocked. When the police told him the whole thing, he felt so embarrassed.

說明：主題清楚，但部分相關敘述發展不全，有些語意表達不甚清楚。有文法錯誤，然尚未影響整體文意之表達。拼字及用字有誤，影響部分文意之表達。標點使用稍有不當。

學測編號5：可－14分

One evening, a wedding party was held in a beautiful, nice and high-class resturant . A homeless named Paul walked by and was curious to what was happening inside. He was starving, and was looking for a place to take a rest. The music was turned on so loud, and the food were smelling so good. Paul walked in without thinking.

It was a place full of happiness, grace and the most important thing, food. Paul couldn´t stop himself from putting the food in his mouth though his mouth was already full of food. While he was eating, he saw a bottle of wine.

"1989´s Wiskey…" he said with a voice seemed to be desired of alcohol. Paul was once a man that was usually drunk every moment. That´s the reason why he was a homeless. He spent all his money on it. He started to drink, one by one, the bottle were enough to full a pakage!

The man came out and saw him with anger.

"What the hell do you thing you´re doing here?!" the man cried out. He quickly threw Paul out and trying to fix the mass Paul made.

Paul was already drunk. He didn´t know what was he doing, and even where he was.

A police car came by and saw him. Paul thought it was a taxi and trying to stop it. The car stopped and Paul past out very soon on the car. Ten minutes later, Paul woke up with a started. He was in the police station.

These kind of story have happened very often in these day. People who don´t work or have no work are all marking around on the street. This really caused a great society problem. These things should be avoid in our life because we have a group of police who should be working for the people. Having these kind of questions can dissepear soon.

說明：內容與圖意不甚切合，相關敘述發展不全，部分語意不清楚。組織不夠連貫，最後一段偏離主題，與前文所敘述內容不符。文法及拼字錯誤，影響部分文意之表達；標點使用稍有不當。

學測編號6：可－11分

One evening, my brother dressed himself up in order to attend his friend´s weding. When he arrived at the resturant, he came across a classmate who hadn´t connected with him since he graduated from college. My brother was so happy that he drank a large amount of wine.

After the weding, My brother walked along the street and he wanted to take a taxi. Because my brother war drunk, no driver wanted to let him get on the car. Finally, my brother glazed at a car so he raised his hand and got on it. He fell asleep as soon as he sat. When he wake up, he found he was in police station. How terrible he is!

說明：雖點出主題但不夠明顯。敘述發展不完整，未能連貫發展，重點安排欠妥。部分文法、用字、拼字的錯誤，影響文意之表達。標點偶有錯誤。

學測編號7：差－6分

One evening, he go to a dinner and eat very much, drink very much.So he has a little醉.When the dime in the end, he will go home by heself.He was walking on the road, and he went to took a taxi.But, he was disunderstanding, he took a police car.And then, the police take he to police局.Next day, at 8:00am, he is disunderstanding, why he will in there?The police is talk him, he was have 喝醉 yesterday.So he is very red-face, and then he just real go home.

說明：雖有主題，但相關敘述未能發展；不但文法錯誤多〈時態前後不一〉，用字、拼字錯誤亦多，嚴重影響文意之表達；字數不足，另扣一分。

 學測編號8：劣－3分

One evening the man went to attend friend´s marry ceremony, he drinks a lot of wine, and gulp face to host.The host very angry because he so not polite.

He didn´t know himself act so funny, and wave his hand for police car.The policeman took him to police office.

As a result, the man wake up look the policeman, the policeman very angry said, "Were are you".Do you know?Then man said, I don´t know." "Why I am here?"

說明：內容太少，行文不流暢，因文法、用字、拼字錯誤太多，嚴重影響文意表達。字數不足，另扣一分。

 學測編號9：劣－2分

One evening, a man went to a party.He drinked much CH3COOH and that he felt asleep.When the party was end he want to went home.He took taxi and sleep on the car.What can the driver do?When the man opened his eyes, he saw aand his family.

說明：內容太少，段落發展全無章法。因文法、用字、拼字錯誤多，嚴重影響文意之表達。字數不足，另扣一分。