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本文節錄自:大學入學考試中心 選才通訊第142期 學測與指考英文作文評分樣例 第一處 游春琪彙整

說明:1. 依提示在「答案卷」上寫一篇英文作文。
    2. 文長120個單詞(words)左右。

提示:請根據以下三張連環圖畫的內容,以"One evening,..."開頭,寫一篇文章,描述圖中主角所經歷的事件,並提供合理的解釋與結局。

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樣例

學測編號1:特優-19

One evening, a man named Kris attended a wedding party. It was held in a luxury hotel, where there were a lot of guests.

Everyone talked lively and happily during the meal, including Kris. Being the best friend of the couple, Kris drank a lots in ecstasy because he felt really happy for them.

Later, Kris excused himself and left the party. He stood on the road, waiting for a taxi. But, unfortunately, he drank too much to stay conscious. Upon seeing a car coming to him, Kris waved his arms immediately, saying "Hey, Taxi!" loudly. Then the car stopped. However, Kris wasn´t aware that was a police car, not a taxi!

Kris couldn´t remember anything that had happened during the drive to the police office.He was waken up by a thunderous sound, "What are you doing? Do you know where it is?" said the police officer. Kris was shocked to death but had no reason for explaination.

About 30 minutes later, Kris was allowed to leave. He was ashamed for his "trip to the police office." He appologized to the police officer for his irrational behavior, and promised that he wouldn´t do it again.

說 明:主題明確,內容敘述相當具體且完整。重點分明,組織具連貫性。文句富變化,幾無文法錯誤(第二段第二句中a lots,應為a lot。)。詞彙使用妥適,稍有拼字的錯誤(例:第四段句中的explaination與最後一段中的appologized皆為錯字。)。

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19

學測編號2:優-17

One evening, John was invited to his old friend´s wedding. Meeting so many classmates in university, he became more and more excited. He talked a lot with other, laughed happily, and also, drank a lot.

When it got darker and darker outside, he knew that he had to go home. So much did he drank that he couldn´t even drive home on his own. He then walked on the side of the road and tried to find a taxi to take him home. He waved to the cars, shouted out something, and even ran onto the road with his body turning round. Not long after he did these, here came a car. It stopped in front of him, and he got on the car without hesitation. And soon, he fell asleep.

When he opened his eyes again, he found himself in the police station. To his dismay, he didn´t remember what he had done yesterday. A policeman came up to him and scolded him angrily. He was too embarrassed to look up at him. He really learned a lesson from the impressing mistake.

說明:主題之敘述完整,文意清楚。組織上前後連貫,轉承語使用大致得當;句型雖有變化,文法錯誤少,但仍有用法與拼字錯誤。標點符號亦稍有不當。

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學測編號3:優-16

One evening, I went to one of my friends´ weeding in my black suit. I was happy that he married a nice girl. And I was so excited that I drank too much. On my way home, my head was dazzling and my feet were heavy that I couldn´t walk well. So I gave up walking home, waving my hand to stop a taxi. Though I thought that taxi was strange with the sparking light, I still got into the car and told the driver my address. Then I fell into a deep dream in the taxi. The next morning I woke up, I felt uncomfortable and tried to move my limbs to make myself awake. When I stood up, I found that I was in the police station instead of my bedroom. What happened last night? A policeman pointed at the police car outside and told me "That was the "taxi" you took last night, do you have any problem now?"

說明:主題敘述具體,但內容略嫌不足。句型有變化,偶有文法錯誤。用字尚稱得宜,雖偶有用法與拼字錯誤,但未影響文意之表達。標點符號稍有不當。

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學測編號4:可-14

One evening, there was a wedding party at a fancy hotel. The party´s atmosphere was so happy and all people including the guests and the new couples cheered to each other all night. Later, the party was over and every person was much drank.

The night became darker and darker and there was few cars on the streets. One of the guests was about to go home by taxi, but he was so much drunk that he couldn´t even distinguish the taxi between the police car. He hired the police car and took on. The police asked where he lived patiently, but he just kept smiled without saying any words…

The next morning, the man finally awoke, finding himself sitting in the police office. He was shocked. When the police told him the whole thing, he felt so embarrassed.

說明:主題清楚,但部分相關敘述發展不全,有些語意表達不甚清楚。有文法錯誤,然尚未影響整體文意之表達。拼字及用字有誤,影響部分文意之表達。標點使用稍有不當。

內容
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14

學測編號5:可-14

One evening, a wedding party was held in a beautiful, nice and high-class resturant . A homeless named Paul walked by and was curious to what was happening inside. He was starving, and was looking for a place to take a rest. The music was turned on so loud, and the food were smelling so good. Paul walked in without thinking.

It was a place full of happiness, grace and the most important thing, food. Paul couldn´t stop himself from putting the food in his mouth though his mouth was already full of food. While he was eating, he saw a bottle of wine.

"1989´s Wiskey…" he said with a voice seemed to be desired of alcohol. Paul was once a man that was usually drunk every moment. That´s the reason why he was a homeless. He spent all his money on it. He started to drink, one by one, the bottle were enough to full a pakage!

The man came out and saw him with anger.

"What the hell do you thing you´re doing here?!" the man cried out. He quickly threw Paul out and trying to fix the mass Paul made.

Paul was already drunk. He didn´t know what was he doing, and even where he was.

A police car came by and saw him. Paul thought it was a taxi and trying to stop it. The car stopped and Paul past out very soon on the car. Ten minutes later, Paul woke up with a started. He was in the police station.

These kind of story have happened very often in these day. People who don´t work or have no work are all marking around on the street. This really caused a great society problem. These things should be avoid in our life because we have a group of police who should be working for the people. Having these kind of questions can dissepear soon.

說明:內容與圖意不甚切合,相關敘述發展不全,部分語意不清楚。組織不夠連貫,最後一段偏離主題,與前文所敘述內容不符。文法及拼字錯誤,影響部分文意之表達;標點使用稍有不當。

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13

學測編號6:可-11

One evening, my brother dressed himself up in order to attend his friend´s weding. When he arrived at the resturant, he came across a classmate who hadn´t connected with him since he graduated from college. My brother was so happy that he drank a large amount of wine.

After the weding, My brother walked along the street and he wanted to take a taxi. Because my brother war drunk, no driver wanted to let him get on the car. Finally, my brother glazed at a car so he raised his hand and got on it. He fell asleep as soon as he sat. When he wake up, he found he was in police station. How terrible he is!

說明:雖點出主題但不夠明顯。敘述發展不完整,未能連貫發展,重點安排欠妥。部分文法、用字、拼字的錯誤,影響文意之表達。標點偶有錯誤。

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11

學測編號7:差-6

One evening, he go to a dinner and eat very much, drink very much.So he has a little醉.When the dime in the end, he will go home by heself.He was walking on the road, and he went to took a taxi.But, he was disunderstanding, he took a police car.And then, the police take he to police局.Next day, at 8:00am, he is disunderstanding, why he will in there?The police is talk him, he was have 喝醉 yesterday.So he is very red-face, and then he just real go home.

說明:雖有主題,但相關敘述未能發展;不但文法錯誤多〈時態前後不一〉,用字、拼字錯誤亦多,嚴重影響文意之表達;字數不足,另扣一分。

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 學測編號8:劣-3

One evening the man went to attend friend´s marry ceremony, he drinks a lot of wine, and gulp face to host.The host very angry because he so not polite.

He didn´t know himself act so funny, and wave his hand for police car.The policeman took him to police office.

As a result, the man wake up look the policeman, the policeman very angry said, "Were are you".Do you know?Then man said, I don´t know." "Why I am here?"

說明:內容太少,行文不流暢,因文法、用字、拼字錯誤太多,嚴重影響文意表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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 學測編號9:劣-2

One evening, a man went to a party.He drinked much CH3COOH and that he felt asleep.When the party was end he want to went home.He took taxi and sleep on the car.What can the driver do?When the man opened his eyes, he saw aand his family.

說明:內容太少,段落發展全無章法。因文法、用字、拼字錯誤多,嚴重影響文意之表達。字數不足,另扣一分。

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  • 剛考完100年學測的學生.........
  • 不知道這裡是不是英文老師的blog
    看到上面的標準還滿緊張的
    如果翻譯題夜市沒有加s導致後面動詞型態用錯這樣會扣到2分嗎
    還有我沒有把足以兩個字翻出來..........
    成千上萬我寫thousand millions of 這樣會被扣分嗎
    還有英文作文沒有分成三段到底會不會影響分數阿..
    我因為太緊張在閱讀測驗而且那天不知道是怎樣
    平常寫歷屆閱測頂多錯兩題或三題這次竟然錯六題而且都是超噢的題目.....
    我前面40題全對結果閱測錯六題害我很怕沒有13級......
    我的作文只知道我寫錯了relinguish這個字是q不是g這樣是扣0.5
    其他的話文法我沒有用到很困難的
    不過內容跟結構我就不知道評分標準了
    我寫到背面中間 這次的英文是我最痛心的一次.........
    現在超想跟英文老師訴苦的
    哀...
  • 你看起來真的很沮喪又擔心。我先回答第一個夜市的問題好了,由於第一題的"夜市"並沒有說一定要用複數回答,所以只要主動詞單複數有一致性就好了。不過第二題的翻譯有說到"他們"所以既是連貫式翻譯題,所以應該最多只會扣一次分數-0.5吧。至於"足以"兩個字有沒有翻出來,只要是整句的句型架構正確,應該是不會被扣分的。"成千上萬"這個詞到底怎麼翻,我覺得見仁見智,你可以說"tens of thousands of"或是"hundreds of thousands of"但是英文裡沒有"thousand millions of"的用法,所以會被扣個0.5分吧。而作文沒分三段沒關係,但至少要分兩段吧。否則就缺乏寫作的一些基本架構觀念了(希望你有分兩段)。最後,這次的考題你前面全對真的很不錯,閱測的確是整張考卷你最棘手的部份。我們幾個老師在解題時,就有兩題會有意見。但是...
    你錯六題也有些太多了吧,一題可是兩分啊。不過期待上天保佑你,讓你的作文得高分,能寫到背面的一半算很好囉。God bless you.

    urWriting 於 2011/02/08 10:29 回覆

  • 上面的學生...
  • 前幾天我們老師才在說平常虧心事做多了,大考當天眼睛就會被矇蔽住,我想我的眼睛真的是被蒙蔽住了.....(不過我沒做虧心事阿)!,因為我不是讀普通高中,我是職科生,不過我對英文很有興趣,所以這次錯這麼多真的很難過....,至少有四題都是沒有認真看上下文,其他有兩題是自己真的有點看不懂,不過閱測扣兩分真的是致命傷,現在扣了12分快跟我寫高中校外模考扣的差不多了.....是我寫歷屆試題來扣最多的一次,沒臉見我的英文老師......,作文是有分兩段,不過我第二段寫的是有點長了些,希望這次頂標是13就好了,如果是14我就要撞牆了,因為我現在根本不奢望自己有14.....,其實我拿過校內英文作文第一名還有全國第五,不過現在說來總覺得有點心虛阿.....還是謝謝你的回覆和鼓勵。 我是桃園某高中的學生....
  • 哇,原來你是職科生,那我實在太讚許你了。雖然你在閱測上扣了那麼多分數,但是還是相當厲害的。我聽一位教授說,現在頂尖科大非常喜歡英文好的學生,他們倒不是那麼地重視其他科目,因為其他專業科目成績好的人多的是,但是英文好的人太少了。所以在甄選時他們很重視英文的成績。你有那麼輝煌的英文歷史,相信在你甄選時會給你大大加分的。

    urWriting 於 2011/02/15 13:44 回覆

  • 又來了~
  • 這次頂標是14
    還滿失望的
    更扯的是我81.5結果頂標82.多
    就差一點點 如果我在專心一點在閱測就好了
    本來想說作文寫的不好 不過還有15.5就滿足了 翻譯也只有6
    不過可以再寫好一點的 反正都是一次經驗.....
    總分也不高四十多而已
    老師 這樣我能過世新或東吳的第一階段嗎(外文)
    他們的標準是國均標英前標 不過我國英都剛好在標準而已
    最低的話就是銘傳了 銘傳沒有就要考只考了 阿~~~~~
  • 現在回信好像太晚了,第一階段的結果已經出來了。不過不管你有沒有過,你都要學習接受這個殘酷的事實。就拿我自己來說好了,當時我也怨恨自己的分數不夠高,明明平常考試都贏別人,為何在最後的賽跑輸給別人。本來我要唸商學院的,結果卻念了外文系,而且還是離家很遠的台南。實在覺得世界對我不公平。但是我到很後來才發現,人生是一場馬拉松賽跑,你要跑很久才會知道誰是真正的贏家。只有喜歡自己所唸的科系,從事著自己喜歡的職業,你才會發現你終究會是個贏家。我沒唱高調,真的是這樣,有時我看看周圍那些當年分數比我高的朋友,他們現在不盡然做著自己拿手或開心的事,(我沒有嘲諷的意味)我覺得自己真的很幸運,才能有今天。

    urWriting 於 2011/03/29 15:25 回覆

  • 上面的!
  • 老師~我現在有通過銘傳應英、文化英國語文、淡江多元文化與語言還有靜宜的英國語文。其實從不知道什麼時候開始喜歡英文,所以對每一場考試都特別在意,但或許太在意了,所以再重要的考試都會跌了一跤,不過我知道失敗會讓我更茁壯,所以每次錯的題目我都會反覆思考,高職我念的是國貿,其實這不是我想要的,但我知道我自己喜歡英文,所以這三年就算再辛苦,我也欣然接受。我希望自己以後也能從事自己喜歡的職務,自從經歷很多次分數的洗禮,我已經看開了,我要的是未來,而不是現在印在紙上的幾位數,現在的我要很努力的準備第二階段,繼續跑向前方,謝謝老師喔!
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  • 請問一下文中使用對話 要像範例5那樣另起段落嗎?就是以“......."開頭的
    還是像範例一那樣直接接在文章裡就好
    因為看到一般英文小說裡都會分段